Task 2 Band 8 sample answer 3

Band score: approximately 8.0

Task: Task 2

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the report.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Should arts-related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge apply for admittance?

Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


IELTS Task 2 writing sample answer Band 8 Essay 3This essay presents a discussion about art galleries and related entertainment and whether it is fair to charge a fee or not [expand title=”get access to” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] ‘to access’ is more formal[/expand] them, followed by a personal opinion.

A charge should [expand title=”apply” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] ‘be applied'[/expand] in order to get access to some forms of art entertainment[expand title=”” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] this needs to be followed by a comma[/expand] for instance a presentation of foreign arts and crafts. This incurs a cost to bring and present them in [expand title=”your” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] ‘the exhibitors'[/expand] own country so a fee must be charged to finance the expenses of bringing different type of cultures to another country. For example, an exposition of ancient Egyptian jewellery in the United States generates a cost for Egypt for [expand title=”transport” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] ‘transporting'[/expand] these various items and an expense to the United States museum who will be displaying them.

On the other hand, heritage collections and cultural festivals should allow [expand title=”of” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] delete this[/expand] free access to the general public in their own country for they represent the history of their own people and this promotes a better understanding of the true meanings of a particular national culture. [expand title=”For example” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] ‘For instance’ – for example has already been used[/expand], national museums where important documents are stored which represent the foundations of the actual political and legal system of a country or ancient crafts which depict our [expand title=”predecessors” tag=”span” targtag=”span” targpos=”inline” trigclass=”my_trigger span_fix noarrow” targclass=”span_fix”‘] predecessors’ – needs the plural apostrophe at the end of the word[/expand] way of life.

My personal opinion is that a charge or fee for admittance should be applied when foreign collections or artistic presentations are shown. Also, it can be applied to national museums and galleries but only if the money gathered is reinvested in the preservation of such institutions or the promotion of similar places.

(252 words)


Comments:
The argument is clearly presented and gives two good points before moving to the personal point of view. There are some issues with punctuation, but a wide range of vocabulary and grammar have been used, and the length is appropriate for the task.


For more student answers, click here